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9 Band Ielts Essay

The IELTS writing task 2 sample answer below has examiner comments and is band score 9. The topic of social media is common and this IELTS essay question was reported in the IELTS test. Check the model essay and then read the comments.

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

To what extent do you agree?

Social networking sites, for instance Facebook, are thought by some to have had a detrimental effect on individual people as well as society and local communities. However, in my opinion, while I believe that such sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on local communities.

With regards to individuals, the impact that online social media has had on each individual person has clear advantages. Firstly, people from different countries are brought together through such sites as Facebook whereas before the development of technology and social networking sites, people rarely had the chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside of their immediate circle or community. Secondly, Facebook also has social groups which offer individuals a chance to meet and participate in discussions with people who share common interests.

On the other hand, the effect that Facebook and other social networking sites have had on societies and local communities can only be seen as negative. Rather than individual people taking part in their local community, they are instead choosing to take more interest in people online. Consequently, the people within local communities are no longer forming close or supportive relationships. Furthermore, society as a whole is becoming increasingly disjointed and fragmented as people spend more time online with people they have never met face to face and who they are unlikely to ever meet in the future.

To conclude, although social networking sites have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same effect on society or local communities. Local communities should do more to try and involve local people in local activities  in order to promote the future of community life.

Comments: This essay shows you the organisation of ideas into paragraphs and also how a clear answer is given in the thesis statement in the introduction and then supported and explained in full throughout the essay. You will also see paraphrasing for advantage / disadvantage language which can be useful for you in other essays. Furthermore, the word length of this essay is typical for anyone aiming for band score 6, 7 or above. Words 280

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IELTS agree or disagree essay - band 9 guide

This is a band 9 guide to writing agree/disagree essays in IELTS Writing. Agree or disagree essay questions are very common for IELTS Writing task 2. This type of questions asks you to say whether you agree or disagree with a given statement and justify your opinion.

In this lesson you will see IELTS writing task 2 sample question + model answer and learn

  • how to choose an opinion for agree/disagree question
  • how to generate ideas
  • how to give a band 9 answer for agree/disagree question

IELTS agree/disagree question sample

Let’s look at an example of IELTS writing task 2:

This is a classic example of agree or disagree question that you may get on IELTS Writing task 2.

You can watch our video tutorial on how to tackle agree/disagree questions in IELTS Writing:



Choose your opinion & generate ideas

Agree or disagree question asks you to clearly determine whether you agree or disagree with the statement. Unlike questions that ask you to what extent do you agree or disagree, this question asks you to have a super-clear opinion. After you’ve decided your opinion, generate 2-3 supporting points for it.

For the task above you have two possible options:

  1. You fully agree that big salary is more important than job satisfaction
  2. You completely disagree that big salary is more important than job satisfaction

 Now let’s generate supporting points for each of the opinions:

  • Big salary is more important
    • Having a job with a high salary makes people feel satisfied no matter what kind of job they do
    • Money is essential for survival and good living

  • Job satisfaction is more important
    • Job satisfaction gives you a sense of fulfillment
    • Doing what you like keeps you motivated and therefore leads to a career growth
    • Money can’t buy happiness and it’s more pleasant to pursue what you’re interested in

For our essay, we’ll choose the second opinion.


Band 9 answer structure

After you’ve decided whether you agree or disagree and generated your supporting points, it’s time to start writing your essay.

There are a lot of ways to structure your essay, but we’ll use a structure that has been approved by many IELTS examiners to be high-scoring and coherent.

Band-9 essay structure:

  1. Introduction
  2. Body paragraph 1 - the 1st reason you agree/disagree
  3. Body paragraph 2 - the 2nd reason you agree/disagree
  4. Conclusion

 

Let’s take a look at each of these sections in detail.

Introduction

Write your introduction in two sentences:

  • Sentence 1 - paraphrase the statement (you can use ‘it is argued/considered/thought that’ to start):
  • Sentence 2 - say whether you agree or disagree with it and extend your opinion:

Body paragraph 1 - the 1st reason you agree/disagree

  • Sentence 1 - state the first reason you agree/disagree.
  • This sentence should contain the main idea of the whole 1st paragraph.  Use words firstly or first of all to introduce the first reason. In our case we’ll use the reason that job satisfaction gives you a sense of fulfillment:

  • Sentences 2-3 - explain the reason.

    To explain the reason effectively, you can imagine that your examiner has no knowledge of this subject at all and you have to explain every detail:

  • Sentence 4 - example.

    It’s always good to give examples in your body paragraphs, even if you’re not asked to do it. In our case, the task asks you to provide relevant examples:

  • Sentence 5 - a short summary of your ideas in this paragraph:

Body paragraph 2 - the 2nd reason you agree/disagree

  • Sentence 1 - state the second reason you agree/disagree.

    This statement should contain the main idea of the whole 2nd paragraph. Use words secondly or moreover to introduce the second reason:

  • Sentences 2-3 - explain the reason (assume that your examiner doesn’t understand the topic at all):
  • Sentence 4 - support your idea with an example:
  • Sentence 5 - a short summary of your thoughts in the 2nd paragraph.

Conclusion

You can write the conclusion in one sentence that summarizes your opinion + 2 reasons for it:

DO NOT write new ideas in the conclusion!


IELTS agree/disagree model answer

This is a full band-9 answer for IELTS agree or disagree question above:

It is often argued that it is more advantageous to choose a job with high wage, even if it doesn't appeal to you at all. I completely disagree with this opinion and think that job satisfaction is much more important than salary.

First of all, I believe that job satisfaction gives people a sense of fulfillment that no money can guarantee. Even if someone is earning a high salary, but feels tensed and compromises with his conscience, this person won’t enjoy his life. While pursuing one’s interests will always bring pleasure and feeling of satisfaction. For example, a lot of famous researchers made their career choices not because of appealing wages, but because they were passionate about science. That’s why it’s more important to choose the kind of work that makes you happy than to look only at a high salary.

Secondly, doing what you like keeps you motivated and therefore leads to a career growth. In other words, there is a strong relation between job satisfaction and productivity. People who love their jobs can easily excel in their fields of work and achieve better results than those, who put salary on the first place. For instance, Henry Miller decided to leave his everyday job despite a good wage and ventured to become a writer. And after enduring years of ups and downs he became one of the most famous and well-paid authors of the twentieth century. Thus, advantages of jobs that keep you satisfied outweigh the drawback of a low salary in a long-term perspective.

To conclude, I strongly believe that job satisfaction is more beneficial than high salary because it makes people happy and motivated.

(277 words)

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